Design of bacteria and antibiotic: as they are free-floating objects, reconsider their 'flat' bottoms, as this suggests they're designed for the ground, when they don't in fact use the ground.
Re-consider your approach to showing the way the antibiotic damages the bacteria - avoid the organic 'slime' thing you're depicting, and look instead at the sort of 'pixel damage' you might see in something like Space Invaders: http://my-meego.com/grafika/spaceinvaders2.jpg (look at damage to bases in this image).
People felt that the black and white was really helping stage your action scenes - so think carefully re. introducing colour - make sure your world isn't too busy or hectic. Keep it clean and simple.
In terms of your script, avoid referring to the antibiotics as 'creatures' - Dr Klappa suggested the use of the word 'compound' instead.
Consider show more accurately they way in which bacteria mutate - so show the antibiotics killing lots of bacteria, but show some of them survive, and show those multiplying etc.
Peter Klappa's email is p.klappa@kent.ac.uk
I suggest you send him your script and get his revisions direct from him.
In terms of colour design, check out this resource - it helps you put striking palettes together:
Hey Sam,
ReplyDeleteA summary of points raised at the pitch:
Design of bacteria and antibiotic: as they are free-floating objects, reconsider their 'flat' bottoms, as this suggests they're designed for the ground, when they don't in fact use the ground.
Re-consider your approach to showing the way the antibiotic damages the bacteria - avoid the organic 'slime' thing you're depicting, and look instead at the sort of 'pixel damage' you might see in something like Space Invaders: http://my-meego.com/grafika/spaceinvaders2.jpg (look at damage to bases in this image).
People felt that the black and white was really helping stage your action scenes - so think carefully re. introducing colour - make sure your world isn't too busy or hectic. Keep it clean and simple.
In terms of your script, avoid referring to the antibiotics as 'creatures' - Dr Klappa suggested the use of the word 'compound' instead.
Consider show more accurately they way in which bacteria mutate - so show the antibiotics killing lots of bacteria, but show some of them survive, and show those multiplying etc.
Peter Klappa's email is p.klappa@kent.ac.uk
I suggest you send him your script and get his revisions direct from him.
In terms of colour design, check out this resource - it helps you put striking palettes together:
http://paletton.com/#uid=1000u0kllllaFw0g0qFqFg0w0aF
Thank you for doing this, it is really helpful
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